Should there be universal health
coverage for people belonging to all sorts of economic background?
(Opinion essay - draft)
(Opinion essay - draft)
Universal
health care provides medical services to all citizens regardless of their
ability to pay. I believe that universal healthcare is necessary if we want to
live in a prosperous and fair society.
First of all, countless people are dying from curable illnesses because they can’t afford to have a surgical procedure or to buy their medicines. For example, every year in the USA about 45 000 people die because they don’t have a health insurance. Secondly, universal health care actually lowers health care costs for an economy. The government controls the prices on medication and medical services which means that private companies cannot make the prices unfairly high. Universal healthcare creates a healthier workforce. Obviously, the healthier a person is, the better they work and the longer they live. Finally, universal healthcare means there will be a much greater chance of preventing diseases. This reduces the need for emergency room usage which is much more expensive than preventive care.
However, some people believe that healthcare is a luxury. They don’t want to pay taxes for other people’s healthcare. But denying healthcare to those who can’t afford it is the same as saying “your life doesn’t really matter because you are poor”.
First of all, countless people are dying from curable illnesses because they can’t afford to have a surgical procedure or to buy their medicines. For example, every year in the USA about 45 000 people die because they don’t have a health insurance. Secondly, universal health care actually lowers health care costs for an economy. The government controls the prices on medication and medical services which means that private companies cannot make the prices unfairly high. Universal healthcare creates a healthier workforce. Obviously, the healthier a person is, the better they work and the longer they live. Finally, universal healthcare means there will be a much greater chance of preventing diseases. This reduces the need for emergency room usage which is much more expensive than preventive care.
However, some people believe that healthcare is a luxury. They don’t want to pay taxes for other people’s healthcare. But denying healthcare to those who can’t afford it is the same as saying “your life doesn’t really matter because you are poor”.
So,
universal healthcare system will save many lives and make everyone more
productive, healthy and happy. As a society we must strive not
only to make our own lives better, but to improve the lives of people around us.
Hello Nastya,
ОтветитьУдалитьthanks for sharing a draft of your essay the topic of which is really urgent.
Here are the things you need to do to improve your essay:
The thesis statement should be more specific: you need to list the points you are going to consider in your work. You should say that a universal health system is important because it will help to do/achive and then add 3 points
Also, you have mentioned statistics but have not indicated its source which is necessary to do whenever you refer to some information taken from any external resource, such as a a newspaper article, a website or some other resource.
Paragraph 3 is too short and should be further developed. In addition, you have used a quotation in it but haven't provided the information about its source. Use the Citation Machine (http://citationmachine.net) to do it in the required format.
Finally, use one of the techniques to make the concluding paragraph more memorable: http://writing2.richmond.edu/writing/wweb/conclude.html